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In these lives of parodies,
In these times of bitter dreams,
We speak in elegies
As the churchyard resonates with peace.
In the womb of the autumn breeze
There lie the things we never say,
Like once proud amber leaves
Which fly away, oh so far away.
Of thoughts too queer to speak
And words suppressed that ceased to be
And the love that made us bleed,
T'was but too frail to be freed.
In our cowardice and pride
Those pretences of our own device,
We hurt and made them cry
And found no need to apologize.
All the times that we stood still
As tyrants drew blood from every kill
And this world never made any sense
Oh but we stood in cloyed silence,
But someday a time will come
When the caskets of our lost words
Will shatter with feelings unspent
And haunt us to our graves,
So for all the lies and silent nights,
The days we've failed to bare our souls,
For all the hearts, bled and broken,
This one's for all the words unspoken.
In these times of bitter dreams,
We speak in elegies
As the churchyard resonates with peace.
In the womb of the autumn breeze
There lie the things we never say,
Like once proud amber leaves
Which fly away, oh so far away.
Of thoughts too queer to speak
And words suppressed that ceased to be
And the love that made us bleed,
T'was but too frail to be freed.
In our cowardice and pride
Those pretences of our own device,
We hurt and made them cry
And found no need to apologize.
All the times that we stood still
As tyrants drew blood from every kill
And this world never made any sense
Oh but we stood in cloyed silence,
But someday a time will come
When the caskets of our lost words
Will shatter with feelings unspent
And haunt us to our graves,
So for all the lies and silent nights,
The days we've failed to bare our souls,
For all the hearts, bled and broken,
This one's for all the words unspoken.
Literature
Forlorn
"Forlorn scenes flash five by four,
Till the tide roars in, and never more..."
I had a dream about you last night.
A jade clasp fastened your amber hair,
The iron wrought to hold due might,
The lines both intricate and fair.
You danced around me,
Smiled and laughed and reached out,
As if to bring me near, and nearer still
(Till) My heart collapsed; heavily,
A compound fracture of broken promises
And cold, lonely nights
Spent gazing
At my duvet, hoping (in vain)
That each tear,
Each fallen liquid sapphire would suffice
In bringing you
Closer
To me.
Literature
Nothing
I used to be lightning.
Power surged beneath my skin,
and in the silence, I heard myself thrum.
I used to be fire.
I burned bright inside, stellar lungs,
and in the cold, I sang myself warm.
Still and dark.
My stone sinews crack.
I am vacuum, deep void of space.
Asteroid dust, floating.
Aimless.
Impotent.
I freeze.
Literature
How Dare You?
How Dare you suck out the strength in my limbs?
How Dare you distract me in lectures with a look,
A flicker of interest?
How Dare you smile knowingly at me, as broadly
As the ocean?
How Dare you know I'd do anything for you?
How Dare you wring my heart in my chest ruthlessly,
And make my cheeks burn?
How Dare you call my name, your tongue tethering to it
As if it were your own?
How Dare you?
How Dare you entice my ears with your jokes, your laugh? "You get to hear my
Droning voce," you say as you glance my way.
How Dare you twist my emotions into a salad of anxiety
And anticipation?
How Dare you holster down that which is sava
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This is a good poem, I like the form, the rhytm and the rhyme. You clearly have some talent. I do, however, have some things that need pointing out.
You've bombarded this poem with commas, a lot of which are not needed. Grammar is as important to poetry as is the words, they can help articulate and accentuate what it is you're trying to say. You need to go through this and punctuate it properly. Until you've done that this piece will always come across as very amateur.
Words like 'T'was' are archaic and have no place in modern poetry it only makes you sound pretentious, which, for me, will detract from my reading of this piece. You want to stay away from old fashioned and dead words.
My advice is to take this poem and redraft it. I look forward to seeing the revised version.