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I hear the wind's raspy requiem
Bid farewell to a long lost friend,
What melancholy strains touch my eyes
As I hear the last song of a flute
Which plays in melodies of ache
From the heart of seasons past,
Nature's bled, yet ne'er this hue
And amber cloaks the morning dew.

Weakening wings that turn and tear
In hope of quietus or sunshine
Relay in fear, both near and far
A hundred tales of golden days,
And by and by, a vengeful mist
Settles over the dying land,
There are no more tales to tell
As open the gates of a colder hell.

And time shivers the night away
In spasms of rain, hail and snow,
And the feeble day lies in slumber
Shy to clear his strident throat,
Enfevered are the Graces
That dressed the rich yesterday,
Mother Nature does the poorest save;
Few beds are warmer than the grave.

The last leaf prances in the air
Free from the manacles of birth,
And now the quiet hours approach
Of solitude and remembrance.
A whisper sheaths another quill,
A prayer weaves another will,
A solstice soothes the ruptured vein,   
Beauty is Beauty in wane.




Winter is coming.
Free verse. After a long time.
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This poem... is neither your best nor your worst. But its a maverick nonetheless, and it deserves its weight of reverence and gratitude.

It reminded me so much of Coleridge and Frost and even some winter poems that I read here on dA that... I am at a loss for words to convey what I feel... the only word that I can come with which is closest to what I feel... is "serenity"...

In the end, its this stanza that completely embodies the work:

And time shivers the night away
In spasms of rain, hail and snow,
And the feeble day lies in slumber
Shy to clear his strident throat,
Enfevered are the Graces
That dressed the rich yesterday,
Mother Nature does the poorest save;
Few beds are warmer than the grave.
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Inamoramento Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
was this inspired at all by the stark house of game of thrones?:) i love that series
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Zark123 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Student Writer
Yeah it was...partially =D Here is a tribute to the Night's Watch: [link]
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Inamoramento Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
that was perfectly awesome.
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Zark123 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Student Writer
Thank You!
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siv1542 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
good job yeah it snows also home to us in Norway. :)
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Zark123 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Student Writer
Haha, I know =D I was born in Trondheim =)
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siv1542 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
cool I was born in Namsos. Are you Norwegian? :)
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Zark123 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student Writer
No I'm not Norwegian, I'm Indian. But as I spent the first 6 months of my life there, I've always wanted to go there and get acquainted with the way of life in Norway. I've seen pictures; it is a beautiful country.
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siv1542 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
ok I see. You can take a trip to Norway to visit the country. we do not have the best summer but winter is more and Nordic country is beautiful on snow. everything is so different here. We also have some letters that other countries do not have ' '
and we have several dialects here. :D
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SylvanSmith Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well done.
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